Comments on: Writing Tips By Tom Colohue: Writing Outright. Part One http://dottedmusic.com/2009/lifestyle/writing-tips-by-tom-colohue-writing-outright-part-one/ Living music in the digital era Fri, 03 Sep 2010 10:55:05 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=abc By: Obafemi Kalou http://dottedmusic.com/2009/lifestyle/writing-tips-by-tom-colohue-writing-outright-part-one/comment-page-1/#comment-87 Obafemi Kalou Wed, 20 Jan 2010 01:19:10 +0000 http://dottedmusic.com/?p=551#comment-87 Tom, thank you from the bottom of my heart, it is so great to read your article and helpful too, it is hard to find this clear concise help in the great cloud that is the internets. I am a struggling poet originally from Nigeria but now living in the UK, I wish to share with you a poem I have written about being a boy in my home of Abuja and having to come to the UK. Great fire, where do you burn? Is it my mind, my heart, my soul Great mother earth, why do leave me? Can I love you, can I hold you, can I sleep with you Brilliant stars of the sky, guide me by night? Will you illuminate me, will you enlighten me Hear the wind of the desert, Hear the wind of the desert, Hear the wind of the TV See the light of the car Smell the fragrance of my hot dog? Thank you for hearing me Mr. Colohue, please advise me well. Tom, thank you from the bottom of my heart, it is so great to read your article and helpful too, it is hard to find this clear concise help in the great cloud that is the internets. I am a struggling poet originally from Nigeria but now living in the UK, I wish to share with you a poem I have written about being a boy in my home of Abuja and having to come to the UK.

Great fire, where do you burn?
Is it my mind, my heart, my soul
Great mother earth, why do leave me?
Can I love you, can I hold you, can I sleep with you
Brilliant stars of the sky, guide me by night?
Will you illuminate me, will you enlighten me
Hear the wind of the desert,
Hear the wind of the desert,
Hear the wind of the TV
See the light of the car
Smell the fragrance of my hot dog?

Thank you for hearing me Mr. Colohue, please advise me well.

]]> By: Rafiq Ma'd Haddad http://dottedmusic.com/2009/lifestyle/writing-tips-by-tom-colohue-writing-outright-part-one/comment-page-1/#comment-86 Rafiq Ma'd Haddad Wed, 20 Jan 2010 01:01:54 +0000 http://dottedmusic.com/?p=551#comment-86 Hi Tom, glad to have you here on dotcotton.com! Not sure what to make of your introductary paragrapf though? Think it could be a bit beter wroten. The problem I see u have with wroting is a lack of imagination. Invariabley the paragraps you are wrronting are an interesting mic of the cereal and the dry. Try to work on this in the future. Ta! And welcome! Hi Tom, glad to have you here on dotcotton.com!

Not sure what to make of your introductary paragrapf though? Think it could be a bit beter wroten. The problem I see u have with wroting is a lack of imagination. Invariabley the paragraps you are wrronting are an interesting mic of the cereal and the dry.

Try to work on this in the future.

Ta! And welcome!

]]> By: Writing Tips By Tom Colohue: Writing Outright. Part Two || Dotted Music http://dottedmusic.com/2009/lifestyle/writing-tips-by-tom-colohue-writing-outright-part-one/comment-page-1/#comment-47 Writing Tips By Tom Colohue: Writing Outright. Part Two || Dotted Music Sat, 19 Dec 2009 18:48:30 +0000 http://dottedmusic.com/?p=551#comment-47 [...] TThis is a second part of Writing Tips By Tom Colohue: Writing Outright. Read the first part at this location. [...] [...] TThis is a second part of Writing Tips By Tom Colohue: Writing Outright. Read the first part at this location. [...]

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